Lee Duna@lemmy.nz to Technology@lemmy.worldEnglish · 4 months agoRevealed: car industry was warned keyless vehicles vulnerable to theft a decade agowww.theguardian.comexternal-linkmessage-square55fedilinkarrow-up1541arrow-down114cross-posted to: [email protected]
arrow-up1527arrow-down1external-linkRevealed: car industry was warned keyless vehicles vulnerable to theft a decade agowww.theguardian.comLee Duna@lemmy.nz to Technology@lemmy.worldEnglish · 4 months agomessage-square55fedilinkcross-posted to: [email protected]
minus-squarejust_another_person@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up3arrow-down10·4 months agoJust a writing tip: separate your points into distinct sections. Your point makes sense, but reads better when broken up into distinct paragraphs or thoughts.
minus-squareKecessa@sh.itjust.workslinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up7arrow-down1·4 months agoIt’s already separated into two paragraphs, separating both points I’m making.
minus-squarejust_another_person@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up1arrow-down4·4 months agoCertainly is after your edits. Thanks.
minus-squareKecessa@sh.itjust.workslinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up1·edit-24 months ago… I didn’t split it in two as an edit, it was split from the get go… Edit: I looked again and the only difference is that I added “proportionally”
Just a writing tip: separate your points into distinct sections.
Your point makes sense, but reads better when broken up into distinct paragraphs or thoughts.
It’s already separated into two paragraphs, separating both points I’m making.
Certainly is after your edits. Thanks.
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I didn’t split it in two as an edit, it was split from the get go…
Edit: I looked again and the only difference is that I added “proportionally”