Wow. Short, eloquent, impactful. Excellent.
I like poems of all lengths but when you can pull off a short one that hits like this, you’re very talented.
Really great and I want to share with my wife, but I sent her, “The Day Of Our Divorce Hearing” post from the other day without thinking and she got all upset. This poem sneaks in, “… and I was about to leave you”, so I think I’ll just write this comment instead.
Oh no! I’m so sorry. I’ll find some love poems for you to read her.
Aw thanks, that’s so nice; I’ll keep my eyes open. You always post great content, by the way, and thank you for getting me interested in actual poetry via your posts on this sub.
Thank you for appreciating them! I always liked poetry but until Lemmy I had never taken quite such a deep dive. There’s some absolutely fantastic modern poets.
At the risk of outing my ignorance: what makes this a poem? I have a hard time reading it with “rhythm” because it lacks rhyme, and the line breaks seem almost arbitrarily meaningless as well.
I feel it is much closer to a “plain” parable, but I’m really not versed in literary science.
I’m uncouth too, because this just seems like extra line breaks to make it “poetic”. I don’t mind the parable, though.
Oh, I actually like the story as well, it’s well written and provokes thought and reflection, which makes it very laudable.
I am just genuinely curious if I missed something in terms of classification.
My understanding is that to be poetry it tries to evoke the emotion captured in an experience. Frequently this is accompanied by rhythm and measure but certainly isn’t a requirement.
That is simply beautiful.
I’m just thrilled by it.
Damn.
Right?
